Re: Food Irradiation article

["Sean Austin" <seanaustin@hotmail.com>]

I thought the draft article was very good.  My only comment is that it 
may be too long.  I would suggest shortening it because 1) it is more 
likely to be published, and 2) the readers won't get bored towards the 
end.  I suggest about four paragraphs.  The first being an introduction, 
the second a discussion of what irradiation is and how it is done, the 
third a discussion of the similarities to other methods of food 
treatment and preservation and the benefits of irradiation over these 
other methods, and the fourth and final paragraph a conclusion 
reiterating that irradiation is safe and effective and approved by many 
reputable organizations.

Be clear and concise and not too wordy, because you'll lose the 
attention of the reader.  Most people read at the sixth-grade level, so 
it needs to be simple.


Sean M. Austin, CHP
seanaustin@hotmail.com

All opinions expressed here are my own and do not necessarily reflect 
the opinions of my employer.


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